Thank You - by Lucky Sharma

https://Voice.club - I couldn’t qualify for the exam again. This was my second attempt. With so much confidence I had told everyone I would succeed, but today I stand in the same place—alone, sad, and wondering what to do next. The hardest part is figuring out how to tell my brother.

My brother loves me more than anything. He works hard for me, dreams big dreams for me, and I try to fulfill them. Some I’ve achieved, but some are still left. I don’t want to disappoint him. The first time I failed, even before I could cry, he said he believed in me, that I would succeed next time. But now, failing again, I feel I’ve broken his trust. Still, I have to tell him.

That night, I gathered courage.

“Bhaiya, forgive me. I couldn’t qualify again. I worked hard, but I failed.”

He made me sit and simply said, “Eat your food, it’s getting cold.” Nothing more. His silence hurt more than words. Did he no longer believe in me?

Later, I overheard him speaking to Mom.

“Mom, I believe she will do it. Next time she won’t just qualify, she’ll get the first rank in the country.”

Tears filled my eyes. I thought he had lost faith, but he hadn’t—he had only increased it. That day I promised myself: I won’t just speak, I’ll prove it.

I worked day and night, sacrificing sleep, and when my third result came, I had not only qualified but also secured the first rank in the entire country.

During my interview, I was asked, “Your journey wasn’t easy. You must have faced struggles and doubts. How did you answer them?”

I smiled and said, “You must have heard the saying: ‘The moon is so bright—don’t talk about it, show it through broken glass.’ But I believe you don’t need broken glass. You can show the moon’s glow in water, in a mirror, or in someone’s eyes. There are many ways, but one purpose.

Today my result reflects my success to my brother, who made me believe in myself. Remember—don’t just say it, show it.”

Thank you.

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Your main character was so fortunate to have a brother, who not only loved her but believed in her. His faith in her ability drove her on.

Sharma, you cleverly introduced some sentiments about a full moon. Your chosen image represented your story perfectly. This was a happy and uplifting read. I look forward to reading so many more of your short fiction stories.

Using quotations in speech is often very tricky, so as I once told my college students check your writing several times. Please see your last paragraph.

@LuckySharma

Your story is worth reading and sharing. I really love the line, “Don’t just say it, show it.” I will bear it in mind too. Thank you so much for the lessons learned.

Whenever I write a story and post it here, my main focus is not just on winning the competition, but on making sure that people like the story and connect with it. To be very honest I really like your comments and whenever I write a story, I always wait for your comments because they motivate me a lot.

I don’t have many people who read my stories, comment on them, or give me reviews. That’s why every comment I receive on my story is precious to me. So, thank you so much.

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Whenever I write my story, I check it many times. I had checked this story several times too, but I don’t know how the mistake still happened. I’m really sorry for that, and thank you so much for your suggestion and I will make sure that it will not happen again.

Hello - I want to assure you that we all make mistakes! What is wonderful is the support and help we get from each other.

I usually go through my entry looking for double quotes then moving forward or backward to find the matching quotes.

I enjoyed your story so much and look forward to each one!

Thank you so much for your encouraging words. Supporting and helping each other is one of the greatest things a human can do, and I really appreciate that you liked my story. I will keep writing more and more stories without any mistakes :slightly_smiling_face: .

I loved the interaction between the siblings and, then, the mother. The importance of believing in someone else is beautifully illustrated.

LuckySharma, you are an exceptionally gifted young writer. Quotation marks are complex and so easy to make a tiny error with. I do not want you to feel bad. Just think in “The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn”, Twain used the wrong pronoun. Common errors of grammar, spelling and punctuation have been seen in Jane Austen and George Orwell. Whether it was the fault of editors, typeset or the author, Ernest Hemingway’s novels are “littered” with errors.

I am your age and many more decades, but Voice.Club has asked me to rewrite some of my fast fiction based on poor grammar. I am even a former English teacher with a Masters of Education in Reading! Basically, what I am saying is all writers make mistakes, so take heart and do not blame yourself!

Please continue writing and bringing a fresh perspective to Voice.Club.

Thank you so much for the encouragement. I will surely write more stories here. Once again, thank you :slightly_smiling_face: .

I’m glad you liked the conversation part of my story. Nowadays, it’s a bit difficult to trust someone, but when you do, the results can be truly wonderful.